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                                      She is

                              electrolytes shivering

                       off winter blue satellites orbiting

                     on ruptures in his arteries and wisteria

                  drenching his senses [clawing] dirt neath her

                      nails, trembling skeletal structures as

                         the stars scream in [unbalance]

                              churning mythology and

                                basking in meteor

                                     showers
[she smiles when lonely things become beautiful]



when asked to describe my otp ;__; cries and i'm still writing about (star)-crossed things
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hey there! :wave:

In celebration of 2014's National Poetry Writing Month, I featured your lovely piece in Glory Be Project's daily journal. Have a nice day and keep on writing! :love:
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skygazing Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014

*happy tears* i am honored :heart:
thank you once again dear!
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
aw don't mention it! :huggle:
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photographic-pupils Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Student Writer
A really lovely portrait. However, a piece of minor, unimportant, nitpicking: I don't know if you were going for a visual poem here but another line between the first and second lines would help with the symmetry of the shape.
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skygazing Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
thank you so much! :iconbackhug: :love:

especially for the advice, i see what your saying ^^
i was  attempting to make a diamond shape out of the word, but i do think another line would have added more balance. thank you! :heart:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
%PoeticalCondition critique

reminds me of a traditional format of a poem... it had a similar type of approach. Its called a nonet.

This is different than that because of it being... palindromic in shape.

The meaning and subtle implications implied by the poem are spot on and have a depth which is truly worth thinking about. Well done.
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skygazing Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
thank you so much for the critique :heart: :love:

i'm glad you enjoyed reading :iconbackhug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) I did indeed Keep writing and keep posting.
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YuukiCross5 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful. :iconfrenchwhineplz:

So much emotions in just one line and your vocabulary is huge my dear.
You really know how to write. Lol, I suck at English and I don't know why :iconteeheeneplz:
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skygazing Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013
lol bb thank chu
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ahhh my vocab is much smaller than you would think haha :heart:
you should see me when i speak / like how do youenglilsh haha OTL

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